Garden Haiku
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Posted: Apr/27/2008 5:22 AM PST
Anyone out there a Gardening Poet? Here is your chance to add a few lines of Haiku. We have one in resident poet: Witt. Here is her explanation of writing this type of simple poem. Joind in and have FUN! You don't have to rhyme, you just have to count syl-la-bles (3) and put them in the form of 5 syllables in the first line, seven in the second, and five in the last line. Three lines. That's it! True haiku deals with nature and usually only has three lines. They may contain less syllables, but for the sake of uniformity, let's stick with 5-7-5. They can be loads of fun to create. It's only three lines, but boy what you can put inside of them! Here's an example that I wrote: early morning’s gifts (5 syllables) sky birds and grounded flowers (7 syllables) lagniappes for the soul (5 syllables) Witt |
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Posted: Apr/27/2008 6:00 AM PST
 ( Ok I'm going to try this let me know if its what you are talking about)Birdies chirping away Morning light begins our day Breezes softly blowing (is the last line 6 this way? should maybe use blow,whisper,flow???) |
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Posted: Apr/27/2008 9:28 AM PST
Fantastic, txrose. Good first try. Good onomatopoeia and tactile images. I'll put on my teacher's hat (just for a moment) and correct your minor errors. Remember that haiku doesn't rhyme so you don't have to worry about doing that. The images are what are important. Bird-ies chir-ping a-way 6 Morning light begins our day 7 correct!! Bree-zes soft-ly blow-ing 6 Now let me show you how to correct this to the correct syllable count. Birds chirping away 5 Morning light begins our day A breeze softly blows 5 Grade A! Next? |
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Posted: Apr/27/2008 10:36 AM PST
 Thanks and the remodel was great (I'll have to look up onomatopoeia
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Posted: Apr/27/2008 11:34 AM PST
The model was great to start with! |
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Posted: Apr/27/2008 3:19 PM PST
 See if I have this one correct: Pe-cans ga-lore oh !(5) Shells thrown on the floor, oh my (7) What shall I ever do? (5) 53 Haiku views Join the fun make one up please Don't leave me a lone |
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Posted: Apr/27/2008 7:50 PM PST
Cattails in the pond Toads croaking all through the night Sounds of nature call. 
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Posted: Apr/28/2008 2:23 AM PST
Txrose, this line is actually six syllables. What shall I ever do? (6) To fix this line into 5 syllables, you could use the poetic way of changing ever to e're. You're never alone, txrose. Haiku is fun to write. You just envision your topic in nature and see how lovely you can describe it. Just like springchicken's haiku. Isn't that a pretty word picture? Cattails in the pond with the croaking? Don't we all love the sounds of nature? Great job springchicken! |
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Posted: Apr/28/2008 7:29 AM PST
Beautiful Springck! When in school my teacher told me to hold my hand under my chin and everytime my chin dropped saying the word it was a syllable. That works fine unless you are talking texinese and then sometimes its such a lazy drop it doesn't seem like one....my excuse...lol...I got  "plenny of 'em"I'm learning hope some more viewers will try too thanks Springy for taking the time very pretty words.
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Posted: Apr/28/2008 3:09 PM PST
This is way too cool! Garden mavens write haikus? Too much to believe! |
